dpressedone89 Posted June 26, 2004 Share Posted June 26, 2004 Broken when the sun burns out and the earth stands still i hold in my hands one thing my life to kill my empty heart my hallow life my broken soul my bloody knife the shadow on the sun is the gap in my soul you've taken part of me i will never be whole if i could wake up asleep and just keep living dead i could avoid my torment the voices in my head when will my life burn out when will i fade away when will i be free of misery and pain take my life take my innocense take my pain and sorrow take my ignorance let me fade into the background forget me as i bleed goodbye now to a world of hatred and greed Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted June 26, 2004 Share Posted June 26, 2004 Wow, deep! I like it! ~Under~ Link to comment
thatguy04 Posted June 26, 2004 Share Posted June 26, 2004 Great poem, alot of emotion too. Link to comment
lunatic Posted June 27, 2004 Share Posted June 27, 2004 Great poem... Great expression of feelings. Hubman Link to comment
mystery Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 amazing, i can only wonder wat happened before u wrote that. awesome poem Link to comment
June4life Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 your poem is really great!!! Just curious, and you dont have to answer if you dont want to, but when you said the shadow on the sun is the gap in my soul you've taken part of me i will never be whole Was the persona in this poem raped? The line "you've taken part of me i will never be whole" kinda makes me think the persona was. Either way, this is an amazing poem, and you are a great poet. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 Wow wonderful poem.I love all of your poetry.Keep writing you have great talent Meagan Link to comment
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