Searching for a Miracle

[infinity8246]

Instead of straight poetry, I write song lyrics, and later muisc (I'm in a band for those of you who don't know. I've got a link as my homepage.)

 

So anyways, here's a recent rough draft of one I wrote about my current situation with my girlfriend.

 

I wish I could give you an answer

But I don't have one for myself

I wish I could wipe away your tears

And take you away from your hell

 

But things like this are never easy

And there's no way they will ever be

 

I don't understand what I need to do

My feelings and emotions escape me

I'm just searching for a miracle

For a hand to reach out and save me, now

 

You know I'd never mean to hurt you

I care about you far too much

I know that I can't reassure you

With me pushing away as such

 

But things like this are never easy

And there's no way they will ever be

 

I don't understand what I need to do

My feelings and emotions escape me

I'm just searching for a miracle

For a hand to reach out and save me

I don't want to push away from you

But there's nothing I can do

I don't know why I push away from us

I don't want to betray the trust

We had

 

I wish I could give you an answer

But I don't have one for myself

I wish I could wipe away your tears

And take you away from your hell

[MVP]

Nice poem, but be careful with those. In some cases, the female, whom you've written a poem for, will be quite flattered with poetry written especially for them. However, many women frown upon that kind of sentimental stuff, because it devalues the man's virility, strength, and masculinity. In other words, some women might see it as a sign of weakness (i.e. being a wimp).

 

Depends on the girl, though...

[QTpie87]

i think its lovely.

[infinity8246]

MVP

 

For one, I know my girlfriend likes the music I write. In this case, I write it and don't care what people think. This is going to be a sad song about pain, because, that's how I felt when it was written. I'm working on guitar chords and a piano part now for it too.