Tell Me What You Think

[Drumson]

Hi everyone,

This is my first shot at poetry and I was wondering if you can give me an opinion on how you think it is. Most of these are based on feelings and just thoughts.

 

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I think, I cry

I hope to die

I feel, I moan

I am so alone

Sometimes I wonder what life has meant

To find myself, my heart is spent

 

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Hope that is any good.

[Tinkerbell]

Hmm, it's alright I guess, but I think you're trying to rhyme too much, it doesn't seem natural.

[Drumson]

ok, I wasn't sure if I was rhymeing too much. I guess it does sound alittle too made up or fake if you will. Well thanks I appreciate your honesty.

[raggamuffin]

Hey,

I dont think it matters that you have rhymed there are heaps of different kinds of poetry some rhymes and some doesnt. I think its good.

[EmptySoul]

hi. I don't think it's too bad; I like it. Like they have said, don't try to make it rhyme. Just write, and sometimes they will and sometimes they wont. The majority of mine dont.

EmptySoul