If I’m not dead (this must be killing me instead)

[Dagless]

Crying in the shower again

It’s like crying in the rain

Crying in bed again

You know I’ll never be the same

 

And if you're in heaven then I must be in hell

cus thats what it feels like being left here without you

 

Its just like;

 

The fire inside me won’t burn

It’s like the world refuses to turn

Life has a cruel way of making us learn

 

And if I’m not dead this must be killing me instead

All the visions of you running through my head

 

And aint it a shame we never got the chance to do the things we wanted to

I thought we had all the time in the world, we hadn’t a clue

I’m still dreaming of you

 

Waking up is the worst part

Opening my eyes breaks my heart

 

It feels like;

 

The fire inside me won’t burn

It’s like the world refuses to turn

Life has a cruel way of making us learn

 

And if I’m not dead this must be killing me instead

All the visions of us running through my head

[StyleLimitz]

Sounds like a song...but that was really good.

[tiredofvampires]

Yeah, Dags, I WISH you could put this to music. I can REALLY hear it!!! Just like your other one!

 

This is really good stuff. Your rhymes don't feel forced, but very natural and the thoughts you are conveying, very beautifully put. I love the crying in the rain image...and especially "the fire inside me won't burn." Wow. You've got a talent!

[Dagless]

I did write this one with lyrics in mind. I think I need to go and learn to play that guitar I've got somewhere up the loft gathering dust

[KellyWyndham]

amazing! you can tell its from the heart, rather than just trying to rhyme words together - thats just an added bonus

[CallingAllAngels]

Dagless...

 

This is excellent, and, it would go excellent to music.

 

Pretty much sums up how I felt all summer.

 

Great job.

 

~Allie

[Dagless]

Thanks Allie, glad you liked it

[tiredofvampires]

If you get your guitar, Dags, I'll get mine! (boy, that dinosaur of mine...lol...)