Delaurence23 Posted November 30, 2004 Share Posted November 30, 2004 i know this aint my best poem, but im just feeling really bad im drinking you out of my life just to erase the memory of your presense your smile and how i fell on my knees when i knew it wouldnt come back i hate you for doing this to us but i still miss you so bad i miss us the angels sang a dark song the day we left, as if it would never come back i am falling at an unbeable rate and i just cant stop i cant control my emotions apart so ill let you tear me to pieces until i take it away from me and take my own life... Link to comment
XrucuX Posted November 30, 2004 Share Posted November 30, 2004 That was a very insightful poem loved the way you twisted the words and yet it got to me...deep down inside Link to comment
EmptySoul Posted April 14, 2006 Share Posted April 14, 2006 Thanks for writing, good job. Empty Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted April 14, 2006 Share Posted April 14, 2006 good stuff, dl23. i haven't read any of your other work yet but this seems like a keeper to me. Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted April 14, 2006 Share Posted April 14, 2006 Its got a lot of emotion i like it, It was original.. or atleast the words you use.. more detailed i liked that Link to comment
darkness1235 Posted April 17, 2006 Share Posted April 17, 2006 I agree with everyone it is a very good poem. Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 Great poem! I love it Link to comment
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