i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 7, 2004 Share Posted August 7, 2004 My trip to hell Drip drop upon the floor I must stop yet I need more The crimson tears upon my skin Showing what I hide within Tick tick goes the clock on the wall Waiting for my final fall My trip to hell that I will take The reminiscence of my last mistake Death is made so complicated Yet not know that I have faded Away from life family and friends Scars that only death mends Though scary as it may seem Its more like a happy dream Taking away all my pain Death is all I have to gain Not a tear shall be cried for me No noise as my soul runs free Freedom like never before As I walk through hell's fiery door Comments are appreciated. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
EmptySoul Posted August 7, 2004 Share Posted August 7, 2004 i like it, the last stanza best. EmptySoul Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted August 7, 2004 Share Posted August 7, 2004 You're a very good writer. I like all of your poems that I have read. Great job. Keep up the good workl =D> Link to comment
black_magic Posted August 7, 2004 Share Posted August 7, 2004 I liked your poem, mainly through the way that you explained that it isnt something negative because its what you have to gain, i have always viewed that maybe hell isnt that bad a place when you dont see through the negative already. i thought it was creative and deffinitley and wide and well written poem. black magic! Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 7, 2004 Author Share Posted August 7, 2004 Thanx for all the positive comments everyone. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
hardcore Posted August 22, 2004 Share Posted August 22, 2004 i love it i must agree it is a master peace you should enter it in the contest i sent in one of mine never know. 8) your bud hardcore Link to comment
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