jackflash Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 THE WAIT A heart growing cold, a soul losing focus a spirit tamed, a life with no purpose Like a garden untended Loveless never mended. Emotions lost Goals given to distrust days turn to weeks, months to years Always this heart saddened with tears. Then a sudden glance, a moment in time Eyes so full of a beauty sublime A lifetime of searching, halted forever A friendship drawing together. A soul captured, with a gaze so pure Two hearts a love born to endure An eternity of life, a promise of love A gift from the Gods above. An Angel was sent, to make it right A Guardian through the dark night Eyes like the stars, a face like the heavens A beauty that forever beckons. A promise to nurture, a promise to care A kiss so perfect, like a breath of fresh air Two hearts melted in one, never to part You, I forever hold in my heart. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 Bravo.That was a beautiful poem.Keep up the good work. Meagan Link to comment
lunatic Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 Hey Jackflash that was a awesome poem. It had a great flow and some real emotion in it. Keep up the good work! Hubman 8) Link to comment
Paul-From-Oz Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 nice one jackflash 8) all the way through and i enjoyed the last paragraph to sum it all up - hang in there mate! Link to comment
just_smile Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 hey i really like you poem, i thought the way you changed the emotions through the poem was very good. really good work, it would be good to see what types of poetry you do, id like to see some, i know id read it ~LJ =; Link to comment
jaiva Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 That was a great poem. I love it. It shows a lot of emotion. Jaiva Link to comment
jackflash Posted July 30, 2004 Author Share Posted July 30, 2004 Thank you all for your positive comments. This was my first attempt at writing poetry, and the inspiration is the love of my life. (who loved it) Perhaps I'll try some more in the near future. Link to comment
just_smile Posted July 30, 2004 Share Posted July 30, 2004 hey your welcome, i wouldnt of thought that it was your first poem, but it was great all the same, so keep writing. i find the idea of having something which inspires me really helps me with writing poetry. ~LJ =; Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted July 30, 2004 Share Posted July 30, 2004 That was a really good poem...I think you should keep writing. under Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted August 2, 2004 Share Posted August 2, 2004 that is a great poem!!!Keep up the writing Link to comment
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