i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 27, 2004 Share Posted July 27, 2004 SUICIDAL STATE OF MIND WHEN DEATH AND SUICIDE RUNS YOUR THOUGHTS WHAT ARE YOU TO DO BUT SIT BACK AND WATCH AS THOSE THOUGHTS TAKE OVER YOU YOUR CHILDHOOD WAS STOLEN RAPED AWAY FROM YOU AND NOW YOU ARE FOURTEEN AND THE HAPPY TIMES ARE THROUGH MY DREAMS ARE NO LONGER DREAMS THERE ARE MY SANITY WHERE I CAN LIVE AND LAUGH WITH NO ONE LOOKING DOWN UPON ME MY FRIENDS THEY ALL HAVE LEFT ME MY PROBLEMS JUST COULDN'T BE SOLVED AND ALL MY ISSUES WILL NEVER BE RESOLVED SO I WRITE ONE LAST LETTER AND SLICE AND DICE ONCE MORE I WATCH THE BLOOD SEAL MY LETTER AS I FALL HAPPY TO THE FLOOR NO MORE DAYS FILLED WITH SORROW NO MORE NIGHTS OF TEARS FOR ONCE IN MY LIFE I HAVE NO MORE FEARS Comments or any thing like that are greatly appreciated Meagan Link to comment
boredguy Posted July 27, 2004 Share Posted July 27, 2004 wow..thats one sad poem... yet it seems to be like a cry from the soul...as they say: poetry is the language of the soul.. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 27, 2004 Author Share Posted July 27, 2004 Ya it wasnt really a cry for help but a relese of pain and pressure. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
HaloDestroyer Posted July 27, 2004 Share Posted July 27, 2004 I really enjoyed this one (yeah, I know, depraved huh?), keep up the good work! Why does it only seem to be us 3 posting on the 'Poetry' forums? I think you could turn this poem into a pretty good song, actually! XxX-Ben-xXx Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 27, 2004 Author Share Posted July 27, 2004 thanx.I never thought about ne of my poetry as a song.I know how come more ppl dont post on this forum? Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 That was a very well written poem nice job Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 I liked your poem, and could understand it more through reading your previous post, but it seemed like you have got some control over whats happening, regarding life and suicide etc, im only saying this because it seems to be a well versed with good rhyme scheme poem when you usually relate a vast freestyle to something instant. does this make sense? almost like you are thinking of suicide but you didnt have intent at that very minute. i liked it though. kel Link to comment
EmptySoul Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 i really like it, and i know how you feel. EmptySoul Link to comment
jaiva Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 Your poetry always show strong emotions and I hope that writing helps with your pain. I know it helps with mine. Jaiva Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 30, 2004 Author Share Posted July 30, 2004 Ya it does help with my pain. Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted July 30, 2004 Share Posted July 30, 2004 Geat poem, I can relate. Keep it up! under Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted July 30, 2004 Share Posted July 30, 2004 Again, I congratulate you. I think you're very talented when expressing your feelings. =D> Link to comment
ComputerGuy Posted July 30, 2004 Share Posted July 30, 2004 I'd post some poems too, but whenever I write a poem, it's only ever for someone specific, I'm no good at writing general poems. You poems are pretty impressive, albeit sad. Maybe down the track you'll have inspiration to write to happier poems, until then look after yourself and keep up the good work Link to comment
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