unfinished poem...need help!

[lonedrifter18]

I feel like no one/Has demonstrated or expressed my struggles/So it's my job to talk about/The petty and important things that make me scuffle/The things that make me scuffle/Tussle with life/So let's talk about the 14 year-old inside/Who became attached to the knife/How I tried to talk to girls/And yield to the fall/Withstanding another night/Of the dreaded blue balls/Not around gunshots or grindin'/Just a brilliant boy with dreams who was poor/Baring the pain of my parents' divorce/Which made my insides sore

[just_smile]

hey lonedrifter18,

wow i thought that it was great, was unfinished poem the name or was it really unfinshed and needs more adding to it? because i think that it is fine how it is, i thought that it was deep, heartfelt and powerful.

anyways if you need help with it i somethimes write so i might be able to.

 

hope this helps

~LJ =;