comfyshoes Posted August 1, 2007 Share Posted August 1, 2007 i think i have graped the basic concept of haiku. feel free to tell me if i'm miles off. i have lots of things lolloing around in my head but can never seem to find the way to get them on paper, so i thought i'd give this a try! bighorn mountains loom storm rolls in on blackened sky yet i am at peace Link to comment
Stu147 Posted August 1, 2007 Share Posted August 1, 2007 i think i have graped the basic concept of haiku. feel free to tell me if i'm miles off. i have lots of things lolloing around in my head but can never seem to find the way to get them on paper, so i thought i'd give this a try! bighorn mountains loom storm rolls in on blackened sky yet i am at peace Well it seems to fit the Haiku template to me. Three lines, correct numbers of syllables per line. And as a poem in itself I have to say that I like it! Good work there Miss Shoes, keep it up. Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted August 1, 2007 Share Posted August 1, 2007 "Oh, I'm new at haiku, I thought I'd give it a try, mee mee mee, peep peep peep." Gimme a break with that! You're obviously an accomplished poet. How dare you pose as an mere amateur, you Scotch egghead! All hating and plotting of your demise to eliminate the competition aside, though, I do like the piece very much. My own private interpretation of it is a very happy one. Link to comment
comfyshoes Posted August 2, 2007 Author Share Posted August 2, 2007 high praise indeed! not what i expected, especially from two masters of the craft. the memory for me is a happy one. one of spring days spent in wyoming. until things went wrong. hey ho. maybe i'll write some more now. and, Blokey, despite what you may think that really is my first ever poem! Link to comment
Portage Posted August 2, 2007 Share Posted August 2, 2007 Peaceful, this is how it made me feel It reminded me of a nice period in my past when i traveled to British Columbia. Link to comment
brando Posted August 4, 2007 Share Posted August 4, 2007 Great job comfy. You seem to have grasped the haiku form. Remember to try and be as descripitve as possible. Imagery is very important in haiku. This one has all the elements. Link to comment
comfyshoes Posted August 5, 2007 Author Share Posted August 5, 2007 i am truly humbled! praise from the master of the three lines. Brando, thank you! Link to comment
brando Posted August 5, 2007 Share Posted August 5, 2007 Thank you comfy. You are too kind. Link to comment
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