bluey Posted September 25, 2004 Share Posted September 25, 2004 its not the greatest but i just need to get my feeling out i feel you coming on like a drug your killing me so softly, so sweetly its so hard to tell your coming over to me what shall i say shall fake a smile and make you happy or tell you what i feel you ask me whats wrong its quiet what do i say? i know you'll cry if i told you you couldnt face what you've done what you've done to me so iu tell you that im fine then i burn up inside Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted September 25, 2004 Share Posted September 25, 2004 This poem is sooo good... I really like it because it reminds me of this song that's like the first (and almost only) love-related song I've ever liked... Plus, that song always makes me sad when I listen to it now, so I never listen to it anymore, although I still have it... keep up the good work =D> Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted September 25, 2004 Share Posted September 25, 2004 That was a very good poem.Sorry your feeling that way though.If you ever need to talk email me. ~meagan~ Link to comment
Gauchori Posted September 25, 2004 Share Posted September 25, 2004 i feel you coming on like a drug your killing me so softly, so sweetly its so hard to tell Aww... you have said just how I feel about someone. I live her so much, but she does not know her. She is killing me with every look, with every hi, with ever smile. But its so hard to tell that this is happening to me, she does not even know I exist from what I know... Link to comment
Serendipity1607307077 Posted September 26, 2004 Share Posted September 26, 2004 That's wonderfully heartfelt.. well done! I love it! Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted September 26, 2004 Share Posted September 26, 2004 Bluey, You know I'm here and I'll help as much as I possibly can. She doesn't realize what she is missing out on. You are an amazing guy. under* Link to comment
EmptySoul Posted October 3, 2004 Share Posted October 3, 2004 I like it. My favorite part was the first stanza: i feel you coming on like a drug your killing me so softly, so sweetly its so hard to tell Good job. Empty Link to comment
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