your my drug

[bluey]

its not the greatest but i just need to get my feeling out

 

i feel you coming on like a drug

your killing me

so softly, so sweetly

its so hard to tell

 

your coming over to me

what shall i say

shall fake a smile and make you happy

or tell you what i feel

 

you ask me whats wrong

its quiet

what do i say?

i know you'll cry if i told you

 

you couldnt face what you've done

what you've done to me

so iu tell you that im fine

then i burn up inside

[Stinkweed]

This poem is sooo good... I really like it because it reminds me of this song that's like the first (and almost only) love-related song I've ever liked... Plus, that song always makes me sad when I listen to it now, so I never listen to it anymore, although I still have it... keep up the good work =D>

[sisterlynch]

What is wrong?

[i_hate_the_world47]

That was a very good poem.Sorry your feeling that way though.If you ever need to talk email me.

 

~meagan~

[Gauchori]

i feel you coming on like a drug

your killing me

so softly, so sweetly

its so hard to tell

Aww... you have said just how I feel about someone. I live her so much, but she does not know her. She is killing me with every look, with every hi, with ever smile. But its so hard to tell that this is happening to me, she does not even know I exist from what I know...

[Serendipity1607307077]

That's wonderfully heartfelt.. well done! I love it!

[under_the_pressure]

Bluey,

You know I'm here and I'll help as much as I possibly can. She doesn't realize what she is missing out on. You are an amazing guy.

 

under*

[EmptySoul]

I like it. My favorite part was the first stanza:

 

i feel you coming on like a drug

your killing me

so softly, so sweetly

its so hard to tell

 

Good job.

 

Empty