mystery Posted July 8, 2004 Share Posted July 8, 2004 Perfect you say im perfect from the way i present myself and the way others percieve me what they think i am is all a mistake i might be perfect in your eyes along with everyone elses but im hiding the person within look past my smile my friends my clothes my skin look at my broken soul melting spirit wandering mind listen to my words not the tone i say them in its all a cover from the pain a cover for the yearning to be gone and away away from all of you the people who expect so much and are surprised when you dont get it get used to me changing my fake smile is fadeing im changing from the person in your eyes to the real person behind my own im shedding the skin that you all thought you had known is it any good?...tell the truth please. thanks xmysterx Link to comment
Celadon Posted July 8, 2004 Share Posted July 8, 2004 Mystery, I love it. I sorta read it in rap rhythm, not sure if it was intended like that, but it worked well. It's really good. Keep writing, and thanks for sharing! Link to comment
lunatic Posted July 8, 2004 Share Posted July 8, 2004 Mystery, I absolutely loved your poem. I could tell it was from the heart and I enjoyed it's flow. Great job!!! Hubman Link to comment
Gauchori Posted July 8, 2004 Share Posted July 8, 2004 lol Nice poem. It would have been better with more riming if you really want my opinion and... Perfect? Thats what I think but, its very good though. Too bad boys aren't into this... 8) lol Good luck Link to comment
PunkPyro912 Posted July 8, 2004 Share Posted July 8, 2004 I think its great cuz it REALLY relates to me.....always perfect in the eyes of everyone else, but of course they dont know but its all BS...nicely done =D> Link to comment
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