ang3l2004 Posted May 25, 2004 Share Posted May 25, 2004 Pain Is that what it takes for you to know that im here For me to be alone and shed a tear Gone Is that what it takes for you to be happy within Can I tell you that this love is no sin Tears Roll down my face after 2 years How can I let go of my fears Lonely That is what I am without you But are you lonely without me to? Eyes what I have that are mine to keep In my mind to see you before I sleep Pain Is what I feel in my heart Missing you dont want to be apart Gone Were you ever really here? Did you even shed that tear? Tears Still rolling down my face never stop What will it take to make us on top? You Are in my heart till this day Will be with me again I pray I Still have that love and I still care I will forever and always be your pooh bear Your opinion does matter so if u like to give it please do so i never really posted a poem on here so i just made it from my heart and i would like some feedback please Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted May 25, 2004 Share Posted May 25, 2004 i really liked your poem, it seemed to have force behind the words written in bold encouraging the reader to experiance what your writing, i liked it because of its power but in itself seems to speak for a deffensless person. i liked the way you structured your poem, its deffinitley a new style to me, and i think that encourages and empowers the poem even more. good work. kel Link to comment
Silent Man Posted May 26, 2004 Share Posted May 26, 2004 I think it was great, you should definitely write some more. image removed Link to comment
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