Please.

[paintedfish]

Please rake your nails

Along the fine hairs of my

Glazed-over, worn out,

Freehand symphony.

 

Please shine your light

On the majesty

Of my egg dropped

Into the tangled webs

Of borderlines and

Freeway nerve fights.

 

Come back, there's hollow space

Yet to be carved away.

Come back, your hollowed-out space

Isn't yet carved away.

 

Please let your words

Split the muscles and

Take the space of things

That are much bigger in my head.

[LemonCheesecak]

Another fantastic piece of work. I love the fragmented style of the piece with the use of enjambment. I'm becoming a fan!

[paintedfish]

Thank you for validating my drivel!

 

Haha, but seriously, it does mean a lot. I also think it's cool that you use words like "enjambment."

[LemonCheesecak]

Hey, I didn't forget everything from high school (ok, that's a lie, I sat for 5 mins trying to remember the word for it haha)

[girl friend]

nothing wrong with borderlines! where did that come from?

nice writing hun.