reisforpeace

This is a sonnet that I wrote, please give me some constructive criticism... ------------------------------------ Just Out of My Reach Love is just out of my reach I lift my hand and it flutters away Why won’t love land and stay? I need it to heal my chest’s only breach To learn from love so then I can teach New love will replace the old they always say Well what if it doesn’t work that way? Love is hardly as sweet as a peach. Perhaps you are right before me So close that I can’t even see. To nervous to come when I call. But be brave my love, stand up tall. Bring faith to those who have lost hope There still is time to help them cope.

this was a poem but i guess it kinda turned into a song. (btw im a girl also) -------------------------- She drives me crazy She makes me insane But with out her Life would be quite plain It boggles my mind And makes me want to cry I just figured out that With out her I would die One problem with this love, It’s a one-way street. I want to move on But I can't lift my feet. So I’m stuck... Stuck this way So I’m stuck... Stuck this way I call her a lot, If she only knew why I need to talk But she’s checking out some guy When she’s depressed I feel like I’m on fire Let me ease the pain It’s her that I admire One problem with this love It’s a one-way street I want to move on But I can't lift my feet So I’m stuck... Stuck this way So I’m stuck... Stuck this way Put a fork in my heart cause I think I’m done I don’t know what to do The pain has just begun I don’t want to seem needy, Or too concerned But she wont let me in That’s something I have learned. One problem with this love, It’s a one-way street. I want to move on But I can't lift my feet. So I’m stuck... Stuck this way So I’m stuck... Stuck this way I probably bore her She doesn’t understand She only sees my surface where my emotions are canned I want to hug her tight And never let her go I’d do anything for her Doesn’t she know? One problem with this love, It’s a one-way street. I want to move on But I can't lift my feet. So I’m stuck... Stuck this way So I’m stuck... Stuck this way One problem with this love, It’s a one-way street. I want to move on But I can't lift my feet. So I’m stuck. -------------------------- i just wrote it today so im up for critisism...but mostly i just felt like it was something i had to share.