bluey Posted December 31, 2004 Share Posted December 31, 2004 its the first one i've done in a while so go easy if it isnt that good so hear i am again leaning out my window with a cigerette in hand thinking about my life i've been on the mend supose its just another bend im thinking of you and all the others i think about how people have changed i watched them change but their the same deep down just hurts to think what they will become i think about today its been ok i saw that person the one that makes me smile wonder where ill be in one years time maybe hear again thinking the same old things or maybe there will be someone hear with me so what do i do next in my life search for that someone or just wait just go with the flow i guess so as i draw to a close the orange glow fading away i hear myself thinking for the first time in a while tommorw is a brand new day Link to comment
usied Posted December 31, 2004 Share Posted December 31, 2004 i like it i can sympathize Link to comment
RockG Posted December 31, 2004 Share Posted December 31, 2004 Wow! Your good! Poets tend to write about thier, or others lives.. personaly experiences and yours about people has a lonleyness to it! Poetry is my pass time and i know good poems and i feel at little what you do in life. Lonely, hoping.. or that is just my take on it.. i say really good poem! Link to comment
shuntaro603 Posted December 31, 2004 Share Posted December 31, 2004 excellent poem, bravo! Link to comment
the_tiger_striped_cat Posted December 31, 2004 Share Posted December 31, 2004 im really not trying to be a jerk by pointing this out. But just so that you don't make this mistake again. You mean "here" not "hear" Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted December 31, 2004 Share Posted December 31, 2004 I like it. Keep writing, I really like this piece of work. under* Link to comment
troublegal05 Posted January 1, 2005 Share Posted January 1, 2005 Wow...Great poem, I could really relate to what you were talking about... keep up the good work Link to comment
ForAnother Posted January 2, 2005 Share Posted January 2, 2005 HAh, yeah Here not Hear.... however if you try and make Hear work in the first line its. So hear.... I am [alive] again. I like that. Maybe structure it like that that it is hearing you are alive again... and then in the end make people think its a mistake and then end it with. So here I am again. That would be cool ForAnother Link to comment
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