dpressedone89 Posted June 9, 2004 Share Posted June 9, 2004 Untitled for now no! for the final time i wont go on i will not live through this i don't care if things will get better it doesnt matter who id miss as i walk into my bathroom and i open my cabinet reaching for some pills ive already taken six, seven and it kills as i reach for the final pill the last obstacle before eternal bliss my life flashes before my face maybe it does matter who id miss i look in the mirror hanging at my wrists and wipe the tears from my eyes i hear the voices saying please stop i beg of you its not your time to die i will keep up i will go on and live through this i do care it will get better i do care that ill be missed -stitches Link to comment
dpressedone89 Posted June 9, 2004 Author Share Posted June 9, 2004 im bored here another poem: bitter sweet victory soft stabbing pain im dancing in sorrow drowning in the rain the harder side of the spikes and razor wire the feel of nothingness the shock after the fire lick it and enjoy the blood in your mouth the pain everywhere but where its needed most i wish it would go away chew it it will be your host barbed wire candy makes me what i am today the painful addiction will never go away forbidden tastes of happiness the banished victory of mine the joy it brings im a junkie and its my line im babbling this makes no sense im in love and dont know how to feel i finnally have happiness its something that you can never steal ok the first one was better huh oppinions please? byeness -stitches Link to comment
QTpie87 Posted June 9, 2004 Share Posted June 9, 2004 hi there, i think they were both good, i did like the first one better, although they both kind of made me worry about how you are feeling, i don't want you to feel bad like that, i hope you don't. but other than that, they were both very good. see ya, Qtpie87, oh yeah, i pmed you back Link to comment
amaranth_04 Posted June 9, 2004 Share Posted June 9, 2004 They are very descriptive, good in that sense. But if you're putting it down on paper, I hope that's enough of a release for you and that you keep safe. Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted June 9, 2004 Share Posted June 9, 2004 I really liked the first one, alot. I know how you feel, I've been there before. The second one was good too, I enjoyed reading them both. I just can't get over that first one...it was like you were writing how *i* feel. Great job!!!! ~Under~ Link to comment
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