A Poem: Realization

[lahso]

This is one of my first poems... any feedback/critique is welcome and appreciated.

 

Realization

 

Open eyes from the dark surround

Awakened by realization, facing facts

Truth tells no lies, hands unbound

With deep sadness heart reacts

Look into my eyes, say its not so

Things once said mean nothing

Having put faith in a persons soul

But faith is lost by lack of trusting

Trust existed upon that first glance

But slowly it disappears from sight

Only wanted to give this a chance

But time proved it wasn't right

Believe in love, a chance to take

A battle much to often lost

Though to much was at stake

And payed the ultimate cost

Lost love and friend, not in the plan

Not even a fleeting thought

Plan was to be eternally friends

But now, my heart is left to rot

[Cid]

I like it, I know how you feel. Been there done that. Keep writeing and good luck.

[neva_black_n_white]

great poem, i loved what you wrote, everythings correct, we do open our eyes to new things. but do you really believe that love is something that we take? or was that to ensure the poem flowed, only in my eyes when in love both love is shared and made equal, as to take love it would be on sided.

 

well that was my analysis, but i loved it! *smiles*

 

kel

[lahso]

Thanks for the feedback. People here are such a positive inspiration to me and continually give me hope in so many ways.

 

neva_black_n_white - I actually was saying that relating, to the girl this poem was about, the love was one-sided. Interesting that you picked up on that.

 

All the best!!!