Emotional Posted August 17, 2005 Share Posted August 17, 2005 The times with you and I face to face, u were my shoulder to cry my sweet embrace My everything and now you gotta see what you meant to me through this poetry I got mad feelings behind every word it's like my heart is still endured my words are stirred my minds blank i might fant my heart sank It was under the sea What happened what went wrong whyd you have to lead me so long i fell, and it was a hard crash a burn, we clashed, it was a fash it wasn't right, it felt so right to just let go and put you out of my sight out of my presense, get you out of my life I wouldn't let myself look at you you couldn't get a word accross i wouldn't speak to you I couldn't think of you I didn't want to let myself get attached to you you were my everything, but now I know I heard the loud sound of the awaking BLOW Link to comment
nothingontheinside Posted August 17, 2005 Share Posted August 17, 2005 wow i really liked it. the rhyming kinda threw it off in some areas (no offence!!!) but other than that i really liked the message the poem got accross. you have some real talent there! keep it up and post some more! Link to comment
Borashi Posted August 17, 2005 Share Posted August 17, 2005 Nice poem, flowed well, I really could feel the emotion, great job. Link to comment
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