ShroudedSorrow24 Posted July 19, 2004 Share Posted July 19, 2004 I know its not very good, and if you want to diss it then don't even bother posting...thanks.... We all scream the twisted verses of life crimson tears hit the ground in silence agony sketched accross our faces bliss is out of reach drained through crooked fingers, what we thought we had is now gone....... but the verses go on Link to comment
just_smile Posted July 19, 2004 Share Posted July 19, 2004 hey i actually quite liked it, it was different from what you read on the poetry forum. what was your inspiration? is just what you are feeling? anyways good poem keep writing ~LJ =; Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 20, 2004 Share Posted July 20, 2004 Nice job.Your talented keep writing. meagan Link to comment
brtlangst Posted July 22, 2004 Share Posted July 22, 2004 I really liked it, so don't be so quick to put your work down. It sounds a little bit like something I might write. Anyways, I really liked the irony of how it started, it reminded me of "we all scream for ice cream". Haha but that may just be my strange mind. I also got a visual of skeleton fingers, just thought I might add that. Either way it was great and it was a poem that a lot of people can relate to. Keep it up. [P.S. after putting your thoughts into writing and getting them out of your head can you sleep better? Lol, if you don't remember this it was from one of your other posts...] Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted July 23, 2004 Share Posted July 23, 2004 I liked it keep up the good work! Link to comment
jaiva Posted July 26, 2004 Share Posted July 26, 2004 Your poem was deep. I read it twice to get the full meaning. I like it. Jaiva Link to comment
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