what do you think of this

[tightyo361]

**** oh ****, eres tan linda como un rayo del sol,

la luz de mi vida, donador de gozo.

eres una rosa, tan bella y bonita,

que aun las estrellas estan celosas de tu belleza.

 

in english:

 

**** oh ****, you are beautiful like a ray of sunlight,

light of my life, giver of joy.

you are a rose, so gorgeous and beautiful,

that even the stars are jealous of your beauty.

 

tell me what you think

[just_smile]

hey

 

i think that it is really nice did you write it yourself?

 

~LJ =;

[tightyo1543]

yes i wrote it for this one girl, i just didnt know if it was that good or not

[kali171]

If your goal is to win her heart, I think this poem does its job. If your goal is to be the next poet laureate, I would think of some fresher images.

[just_smile]

hey

i deffinatly think that will do the job, i think it is really sweet. are you going to give it her in english or the other?

 

~LJ =;

[tightyo1543]

i actually just moved to south america, so the girl i like speaks spanish. well, thanks everyone, i just thought that up in like 2 min. and just wanted to see if it was good or not.