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[Chillyfrog]

I wrote this poem thought maybe some of you would appreciate this!

 

He travels down the road of old world war,

He remembers the sites and battles galore,

The smell of death and smoke on the rise,

He covers his face and sits down to cry.

 

Noises of justice and fragments of mystery,

They rise to defeat, they all have a history,

Rain falls on there ground and madness still to follow,

The guns packed and loaded, no shell remains hollow.

 

The day never ended and the souls never died,

The war never gave and the end never lied

The only thing he remembered was the end of his road,

The world of all wars, a flag, and a simple rose.

[humanoidcontent]

Very nice! Well done! written to the extreme. Bravo! Good rhyming! flows easily and naturally. beautiful phrases "the end never lied" and "smoke on the rise" well done. This poem avtually falls into one of my thoughts (one of many millions) of an army for the world. Shouldn't we have a global anthem? I mean, we;ve been alive now for centuries and centuries, but we are still separated. Shouldn't we unite?

 

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[punkrawker359]

VERY NICE POEM, i esp. like the last stanza. and i dont think i'll get myself started on world politics and global policies, lol i dont wanna type that much.

[humanoidcontent]

Ahh- c;mon punk- mesage me a nice long political debate- It's the only way we learn! I say we gotta unite and no one disagrees so I guess every1 agrees (whistling) oh- lets not take focus off of the poem though- beautiful poem ALL HAIL TO THE POET!

 

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[jealous2003]

Very good! Meaningful too! More poems liek this guys, keep 'em coming!!!

 

[neva_black_n_white]

beautiful, i wasnt expecteing that ending, very powerful. god it kind of puts things in the light alright, and deffinitley gives a different out look. you show us that the world just doesnt end, it goes on in history and if not that in others memories, great poem.

kel

[Chillyfrog]

Thankyou GUys!