it doesent have a name yet but, wat do u think

[sum1umiteno]

As I lay in my room and wait

Let the demons decide my fate

The knife comes down, I bite my lip

Down my arm a single drip

I go numb, A glimpse of hell

Now its up to fate to tell

Will I live or will I die

To give fate another try?

 

 

so wat do u think? Be honest

[abcd1234]

Its very good but could probably do with a few more lines or even another verse.

 

Perhaps you could call it "My Fate" or "Second chance" or "Game of Death", i know that the thrid suggestion is not original but it is fitting for the poem.

 

abcd1234

[thatguy04]

Wow, good poem, a bit morbid, but good nevertheless =D>. For a title, you could use something like "Lost Grip" or "Gamble With Fate". (But abcd1234's "Second Chance" sounds good also)

[QTpie87]

that sounds really really good. i love poems like that. i don't know what you should call it, but im sure it will come to you sooner or later. good work.

love Qtpie87

[ForAnother]

Maybe call it "And it comes" or "Bringing it in to Tell" or "Too Numb"

 

I like it

 

ForAnother