gefallener_engel

wow.. thats nice... i am very interested as well if you dont mind, sounds like you have a lot of talent

this is very powerful and really spoke to me in an all knowing way and yet made me think. sorry if that makes no sense, but its how i felt. i really like. keep it up

can i please get some neg/pos feedback on this one? anything would be great. thank you

You pull them off

One at a time

To see me suffer

Just for you own enjoyment

You watch me stumble

You laugh as I continuously fall

One wing off at a time

I can no longer fly

It's all your fault

It's all my fault

It's interesting to see you smile

Simple enjoyment by slight pleasures

You pretend that you care

Your smile shows your lie

You could care less

I'm just a toy

As you watch me squirm

You watch me struggle

To get to tomorrow

So aimlessly and blindly I crawl

You have taken my legs

My feet, my wings

I call for help

But no one is there

To hear

Me

scream

I look into your eyes

As gentle as the moon glares

At the small stars surrounding him

I reach out to hold you

When I see your tears

As bloody as the sunset itself

I hurt to see you hurt

Just as the moon would cry

Watching its stars bleed

Right out of the nighttime sky

My arms wrapped around

Your gentle shoulders

Pulling you closer to my heart

I can feel you breathe

In and out, slowly you shudder

Crimson tears stain my shirt

But I pull you closer

You're so used to being pushed away

But the only thing I push away

Are the bloody tears out of your eyes

I kiss your forehead

As your confused eyes look up

Right into mine

Yes, babe, someone cares

I wasn't to hear it all

Spill, I'll hold you

No longer will you fall

No longer will the world spin and make you dizzy

While you're in my arms

I care to see you smile

I hurt when you cry

When you hurt

When you hurt yourself

Come closer to me, baby

I want to make all the pain go

Away

im not much of a poet but i write all the time... i suck... so heres a poem anyway... dont fall out of your chairs OR wet yourselves from laughing too hard... actually if it makes you happy, then go right on ahead and do that...

Reach up high

Catch the stars as they fall out of the sky

The world is ending

And my wounds aren't mending

The innocent child pulled the alarm

There is no real end to self-harm

Look up anyway

The pain will end someday

Throw away your sharp toys

Silver metal makes a distinct noise

As it hits the bottom

The look of my razors seduction is no longer modern

But I can't seem to resist

As I drag it accross my wrist

I want to take control of my life

I have control with my knife

The stars fall endlessly against my wrists

Like a soft, crimson angel's kiss

Fallen angels cry black tears

They made a mistake to fulfill all fears

Like me, totally misguided

They hate life and try to fight it

Watch the flowers frown as I walk by

I make everything worse -- don't catch my eye

I tried to catch the tears that fell

But you got worse, I can tell

I'm sorry for the pain I've caused

But you never even paused

When you saw my body cut wide open

On the ground my soul is broken

Stars still fall all around

As my lifeless body lies on the ground

Close my eyes, say goodbye

I've finally curled up into a ball… and died.

engel

great job.

if i had one talent it would be the abiltiy to write.

ill give you all an ego boost and post some of my stuff!

have a good day

pm me anytime

engel

nikki... good job getting her to post it.

i really like it... it hits so close to home. if u ever wanna talk pm me. very good job, you've got excellent talent here!

engel

nice. short, simple to the point and deep. i really like it. when you're at the bottom you'd better start climbing up... i hate it (especially when you're out of shape like me) but its the only way to go, well unless you wanna run in circles at the bottom until you throw up on yourself... yeah thats what i thought! im a pretty sarcastic person but ill listen. pm me if u wanna talk anytime.

engel

nice!! keep it up

nice poem! i like it

-ich bin schon gefallen.