Hey, So I've never really written a poem, but I'm in med school. And a friend of mine said our student organization is trying to find a way to honor the people who donated their bodies to our anatomy lab to study. And I can't draw or take photos, so I want to submit this as an entry. I am scared of being made fun of, so pleeease be honest. If it is silly, please tell me so I don't get laughed at. Here goes:
Steady mind, Steady hand
I still remember my rough start
In the old anatomy lab
I recall it saddened my heart
to think just months ago
you were warm and had a smile
but now you're always cold
I couldn't handle it for a while
But now I see what you really were
and how you've helped me on my way
This priceless gift you left behind
made me the doctor I am today
Looking down on my patient asleep
Your memory brings a smile to my face.
The image in my head is of your gift
And this gift is a treasure I will always keep
What do you think? stupid? OK? pretty good? Any warm and fuzzy feelings? Thanks for any feedback
Honest feedback please :)
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Hey, So I've never really written a poem, but I'm in med school. And a friend of mine said our student organization is trying to find a way to honor the people who donated their bodies to our anatomy lab to study. And I can't draw or take photos, so I want to submit this as an entry. I am scared of being made fun of, so pleeease be honest. If it is silly, please tell me so I don't get laughed at. Here goes:
Steady mind, Steady hand
I still remember my rough start
In the old anatomy lab
I recall it saddened my heart
to think just months ago
you were warm and had a smile
but now you're always cold
I couldn't handle it for a while
But now I see what you really were
and how you've helped me on my way
This priceless gift you left behind
made me the doctor I am today
Looking down on my patient asleep
Your memory brings a smile to my face.
The image in my head is of your gift
And this gift is a treasure I will always keep
What do you think? stupid? OK? pretty good? Any warm and fuzzy feelings? Thanks for any feedback