SxcLady Posted April 11, 2006 Share Posted April 11, 2006 What does everyone think of this poem??? Is it too overboard??? Please let me know .... Thanks! Decisions ~For Someone Special~ That day that we first met... I liked you. That day at your house ... I fell for you. Those days we spent together ... I loved you. And now im Obsessed with you. Your pictures are on my walls, Your name has reached my diary, You've touched my heart, And it feels like your not letting go. My friends say to keep trying, "Just back off a little" they say, You begin to ignore me, And I feel really riddled. I want to feel your arms around me again, I want to feel your tender lips on mine, I want to be with you, in your room again, I want to be yours, but I guess there isn't an end. Our relationship will stay like this, Until you decide, Its up to you what you want to do, But hurry, im going crazy without you. ~SxcLady~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
enigmaz_Barbie Posted April 11, 2006 Share Posted April 11, 2006 aww i like it!!! Is it ok if i copy it and put it in my jounal? its so beautiful!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SxcLady Posted April 11, 2006 Author Share Posted April 11, 2006 Yeah for sure... You dont think its too overboard??? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
enigmaz_Barbie Posted April 11, 2006 Share Posted April 11, 2006 Nope, I think its deep with emotions! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SxcLady Posted April 11, 2006 Author Share Posted April 11, 2006 Thanks heaps! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheFallenShadow Posted April 11, 2006 Share Posted April 11, 2006 This is good, full of emotion and i would think that it says alot of what a person feels when they have fallen in love with some one very deeply. Keep up the good work... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
StrangeFellow Posted April 11, 2006 Share Posted April 11, 2006 I think it's absolutly beautiful, full of a genuine love and a pen that expresses it. I like how you mix your styles in the stanzas: the cause...effect, then the two frees, the repeated first words then ending with the frees. Keep up the wonderful writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SxcLady Posted April 12, 2006 Author Share Posted April 12, 2006 Thanks heaps everyone. Just got nervous about it being too overboard, because the person it is about found my book and opened it not knowing whose it was and read that one poem. When he realized it was about himself hes been acting differently towards me. In a good way I think. But anyways, Just wanted to thank you all. Thanks! Love SL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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