neva_black_n_white Posted January 27, 2006 Share Posted January 27, 2006 You plunge your hand in Wrip my heart out Watching me bleed My eyes run sharp Blood slides down my chin As I cough up from below A little guilt those eyes do show Its as though im alive again Just feeling the pain You can let me die Its got to be dragged out Wragged Pulled You run a finger over my cheek So powerful Why am I so weak? My eyes shed tears Invisible to the naked eye I try to remain powerful Why cry Why cry for you? Link to comment
darkblue Posted January 27, 2006 Share Posted January 27, 2006 Very moving. Concise and powerful. Well done. Link to comment
valenski Posted January 28, 2006 Share Posted January 28, 2006 It really give a visual representation of the expression "rip my heart out". Was it an awful break up? Any way I like it. Link to comment
ShySoul Posted January 28, 2006 Share Posted January 28, 2006 Moving, powerful, and full of emotion. Very visual and graphic. Great job. Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted January 28, 2006 Author Share Posted January 28, 2006 Thanks guys. it was just what one was feeling at the time *blushes* Valenski: Im still in the relationship, it was just something that i felt at that moment. I dont really know how to describe it, but i did, at the time, felt like hed ripped it out and just watched me. so. Thanks though *smiles* neva Link to comment
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