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Starting Off As Friends


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Following on from my thread yesterday, here is the letter I have ended up composing:

 

 

 

I think its light and airy, I've tried to keep it friendly but also included "inside jokes" that only the 2 of us will know (it might come accross as sarcasm, but it's really only a private joke). I hope that what she'll get from this is that I am more than reay to be around her again, and I want to be friends.

 

Comments, criticisims, suggestions anyone?

Posted

Very sweet.

 

One suggestion: perhaps go a little lighter on the exclamation marks. There's at least one in every paragraph--it makes the note seem a little forced. Only use them when you actually have something to EXCLAIM. If it's just a statement, a period feels more natural and less forced.

 

It is a very nice note.

 

YS

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