chickidee23 Posted October 28, 2008 Share Posted October 28, 2008 My bf asked me to write him a poem a while ago - he has read previous ones and liked them - but I couldn't write one on the spot. So i've been working on one, trying to get it done in time for his birthday (tomorrow!!). This is just the rough draft but if the one you loved wrote this for you, would you like it? You The shape of your nose The way your eyelashes curl Even all the hair your body grows It's everything about you When you make me laugh When you take my hand Even when you wink at me It's everything about you Your kisses leave me breathless I always shiver beneath your sweet caress You have a way of easing my mind My dreams are peaceful when we are intertwined My thoughts are never far from you My heart has decided To you it shall always be true I dream of the future More than I ever used to It's all because of you Link to comment
Cognitive_Canine Posted October 28, 2008 Share Posted October 28, 2008 I would scratch the last line and put "It's everything about you". It's lovely. Link to comment
blueangel Posted November 6, 2008 Share Posted November 6, 2008 I've been reading your posts. You are so incredible lol. Hope I dont sound weird now, but I really like your expressiveness. There's something about it, that's for sure! Great poem. Link to comment
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