NightLily

The idea is good.. one thing is definitely make sure you spell the artist's name correctly. It is O'Keeffe.

One change you can make is to mix up the sentence structure a bit. You start many of them with the subject right off that bat. You can also combine the idea of the 2nd and 3rd sentence so the reading flows together better and is less truncated sounding. Also I would combine the 4th and 5th sentence into one and take out the ambiguity about what "they" in the 5th sentence refers to.

Beyond that look at your diction. Circle the words you use repetitively and see if there is a more varied or eloquent way to say those things.

Those are some quick fixes. I hope my input can be helpful to you.

Those are really great pics and I like the story. Where can I get me a man like that? haha

SuzyQ, I just listened to it, it is sooo good, you're really talented. You've never had lessons? That's so hard to believe. Please don't tell me you're doing another job, you should definitely do music, I think you can get somewhere with it!

Thanks Quirky.

I haven't really had lessons in singing. I had like.. 4 months? when I was 16 but that really wasn't enough to learn very much. I think because she was more focused on getting me to pronounce italian correctly. So that was about 6 years ago

I'd like to do some singing and music on the side and try to make a little money off of it. But mostly, I would like to perform.

Yeah I thought it would be fun to try branching out from the more classical type vocals but I seem to be semi clueless when it comes to singing in other ways! I put a little thing together with short excerpts of "country", classic rock, and R&B/pop.. but now that I listen back

it is funny how hard it is for me to sing without a full sound and vibrato...

That looks pretty cool actually.. would make a really good logo.

Oh good idea for a thread.. don't know of any talents currently but I'll keep you posted..

quirky- the very first thing I thought when I heard your music was "bjork" lol. Do you listen to her?

I want to sing in a band but I am a n00b in some serious need of some training. -_-'

Oh and I write the music..

^that post was mainly about commenting on my comment

You might like John Denver...

(I do actually like a few of his songs)

Your nose kind of distracted me. Moving all over the place...

You might like Iron and Wine or the soundtrack to Once (the movie) if you don't know of them already.

I am letting him talk to me because he keeps begging somebody just get me out of this hell. ..

 

Working out a lot has certainly helped my moods. I think my new hobby may have to be making endorphins, good stuff. Not to mention im down 35 pounds in the 3 months since the breakup... got another 30-40 to go to hit my goal.

That is awsome! I am getting a gym membership as well once I get the energy to eat or drink. I want to put on some muscle and lose some fat goals help.

day 1.. is that all i write..?

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Wow you guys have some really nice cameras and pictures Oo. I just scanned through but

Enola: your pictures look great. Seriously. Some of them could be used in text or in magazines. There was one of a fountain with the water pouring down and then a road misty at night with the trees along the side.. sooo pretty.

Sidehop: great, fresh colors.. and your daughter is uber cute!

Colorblue: this reminds me so much of my dog he loves biting at the water. Pretty cool to see it still in just one moment

Looks good. I just noticed your first and last name is on those images though. Are you sure you want that online?

Vector fields I've heard enough, you're depressing me haha

?? Didn't like those or something?

I can't imagine ever having the willpower to read a math textbook, I'm on an Engineering degree heavily based in complex mathematics and I've never so much as touched a book. My idea of hell!

 

Saying that I am geeking up on my C++ with Stroustrup's "The C++ Programming Language". That's more out of necessity than actual leisure however, got to complete a pretty complex program by the end of the month.

 

Anyway, I'm reading Burroughs' "Naked Lunch". It actually horrifies me at some parts. Such a strange, strange piece of work.

It is just Linear Algebra (manifolds, vector fields, matices.. what have you). Trying to fill in some gaps. No big.

I'm too emotional to be reading this right now. The end made me feel like tearing up..

Hey go libertarians.

I r reading math textbooks.

Books not related to uni:

Umm.. Advanced Linear Algebra..

Uh, and this book called "Einstein's Mistakes." It is less theory based and goes a lot into the evolution and history of scientific thought up through the 20th century.

Ahh.. I agree with your post in many ways. Are you a bit bitter over this? From the sounds of it you are, and I know I am. Hehe. I guess these men just aren't worth our time. We both deserve Batmans Kate, twin Batmans.

Take care,

SUzyQ

Heh. Thanks Stranger.

Looking back on what I posted it really DOES sound bitter. But, I am in a better mood after doing some cleaning and packing (I had just woken up).

And you are right, we all deserve happiness (except for.. ) Joking.

-SuzyQ

Well.. does she have any fantasies she might like to try "acting out?" heh. Also, if you aren't already, try introducing some sexy lingerie. If all else fails, at least that would be a surprise.

*yawn* Sorry but I have to cut this post short--door bell. ^_^

Take care,

SuzyQ

Yeah dizzy bruce, rub your alchohalic tendencies off on a 14 year old boy.. smooooooth (joking of course)

Well, first dates can sometimes be a little awkward and somtimes they feel completely natural. Like others have said, have in mind some things to talk about. You could also try complimenting her in a gentleman like fashion. Bad example: "You are a really hot broad." I wouldn't try this. But saying something about her hair being nice or her looking pretty even beautiful could be sweet of you.

Also, be the gentleman and make her comfortable. Don't sit too close and just be your normal friendly self. Put on some nice clothes, brush your teeth, and do whatever other things you do to keep up your hygeine. Also, if you use cologne or are thinking about it, don't put on too much. The best way to put on perfume or cologne (usually) is to spray the air and then walk through the mist. Note: I wouldn't do this with your eyes open.

Have fun!

SuzyQ

Heh.. I can relate to this girl in many ways. I too have moved my whole life. The average amount of time for me to be in one place (I calculated this last night) is about 1.7 years. *sigh*

I know what she is going through and I can tell you that it isn't fun. Her time alone will hopefully allow her to heal to the point where she can be happy but I don't see how this would fix her problems. Like OceanEyes said, she probably needs a counselor (which is odd for me to say because I completely deny my need for one myself). Most likely, if she is anything like me, she can't even IMAGINE what it is like to be grounded in one place or to have a person you can depend on. She may not even know that she sees the world in a different light then everybody else. She may see the world as a cruel place where you have to look out for yourself because the "wolves" will get her if she doesn't. She may think.. everybody sees things this way.

I will be on the other side of the planet for the next month in a few days.. and then I am relocating on the other side of the continent right when I get back heh.

So, seeing as I too feel like her (most likely) I can tell you what would help me. Give her some space to think things through a bit but occasionally make sure she knows that she in on your mind and that you care. Offer to help her and if she allows you, try to be the "stable" friend. One that she can depend on to have a fairly even temperment and to be there on a regular basis (not a whole lot one week then gone). Also, try extra hard to try to gain her trust. With a person like this it could be harder. Make sure you are breathtakingly honest with her.

Just support her and be there for her and everything should turn out fine.

Take care,

SuzyQ

Well... I would try telling your parents directly and calmly exactly how you feel about the situation. If that doesn't work and they still refuse to accept him ask yourself this:

-Is this guy worth causing this fude in my family?

-Is there a possibility that what my parents are saying is true?

-Should I listen to them?

Then you have a few options from there:

-Dump the guy and explain to him that your relationship would be too difficult and hurtful to maintain for the both of you.

-Continue to date him secretly (lots of stress!!!)

-Continue to date him not so secretly and see what actions they take to end it

-move out.

The options don't really look all that good.. but I would choose wisely. IF you continue to date him with out your parent's consent--depending on the type of parents that they are--they could hold a grudge towards you and your relationship could be really damaged (with your parents).

The thing is.. it is hard to tell sometimes if your family is being either overly protective or if they are just rightfully looking out for your best interest.

Take care!

SuzyQ