Phoenixfire

I love it. It is short but articulated, flowing from one line to the next. It sounds like how my first kiss felt, and as a fellow writer I think that is all you can ask for, to other feel like you did

Thank you very much

Alrighty well quite a while ago I came on here and wrote a few poem-type things that were really happy and everything was going great. For some reason I've been having quite a few issues lately, not with anyone else really just within myself... I decided to write down how I feel so this is what I came up with. It was longer then I thought, but you never really know how these things will turn out... I appreciate any and all feedback, whether it be constructive criticism or just a reflection. Without further ado, here it is: Everyone else believes it. Everyone thinks they see. Everyone else believes it. Everyone else but not me. I stand on the stage of the world, And as the cutain rises I gasp. I reach for a spotlight to claim, But they all slip away from my grasp. I sit in the dark and I ponder, why somebody else stole the show. My mind starts to race and I curse at myself Why them and not me? I don't know. Perhaps it was flaws in my singing, a few little notes out of key. Perhaps I was just bad at dancing, and they were all laughing at me. I sit and I think and I question, too occupied to notice or realise That as I sit in darkness and question myself, Chances are passing before my eyes. Then I notice too late and the questioning stays A viscous cycle which seems without end. I sit and I wait and I think and I curse Not budging not willing to bend. I search inside for answers Ingnoring every kind-hearted hand. Inside I question if the moment in light is even worth starting to stand Because the moments I feel confident And rise to reach out for the light The times that I fail settle into my head and the failures just fill me with fright. My mind ignores the victories, the losses fill my heart I don't even stand as often stopping myself before I start. Every drip of self doubt is another piece of hay upon the pile on my back which broke along the way. Everyone calls out to me "Don't give up keep trying" 'What use is it?' I answer before breaking down and crying. They tell me all these stories all these things that I could do. They tell me tales of happy endings and how to make them come true. They try and try to show me but I still just cannot see. I sit alone in darkness and I cannot believe in me.

This is another poem I wrote recently, inspired by the writing and work of others on this site... I appreciate any feedback as it will ultimately help me improve my work, and I really hope you enjoy A heart, scarred by the darkness and pain, Sheltered from the storm and sheltered from the rain, Suddenly breaking free of protection, Searching despite the constant misdirection, Looking for someone to have and to hold, Transforming from being quite shy to quite bold, Fighting against those who wish to defeat it, Praying to find the other half to complete it, Temptation and darkness waiting so eager, As I struggle for brave to overcome meager, Found by one who was selfish and cruel, Dropped crushed and cut, called out like a fool, The heart sought refuge, weighed down by the sorrow, Unable to see the possibilities of tomorrow, Until one day two gentle hands, Picked up this poor heart but made no demands, Giving compassion and truth never ending, Refusing to break, instead always bending, This kindness and love taught the heart how to live, Being no more afraid and learning to forgive, For the heart which helped to heal my pain, Was cut and scarred the very same, Hurt by others but still strong, Able to keep moving along, Driven by life, love, and laughter, Searching for an ever after, That heart helped mine to heal and grow and I think I finally get it, Those who live their lives in fear and anger will regret it, But those who help each other grow and teach others to forgive, While everyone must die they are the only ones who truly live.

So I've written a few poems on here before, but not in a few years... Upon reading through some of the other poetry on this site I was inspired to write again, so here it goes. Oh, an all feedback is appreciated This mask has cracked. A character of false joy, a smile that hid my sadness and pain. This mask has cracked. Eyes full of hope peeking out from those which held nothing but fear and suffering. A piece falls from the mask. My head rises slowly, the weight lifting from my body and my heart. A piece falls from the mask. The same hands which put on this mask now pull and claw desperately to remove it. The face behind the mask. It bears a smile which hides nothing, the sadness and pain crumbling with the mask. The face behind the mask. The man I wish I never hid away, afraid of the world and afraid to be hurt, but no more. No more hidden by the mask. I show myself finally, a heart ready to love and no more afraid of falling. No more hidden by the mask. I show my true tears and my true laughter and my true smile, no more afraid of anything. No more trapped by the mask. Able to trust and believe and enjoy. No more trapped by the mask. Able to love and live and laugh. I am finally free; Of these chains Of this fear Of this sadness Of this mask This mask has cracked. A piece falls from the mask. The face behind the mask. No more hidden by the mask. No more trapped by the mask.

You have no idea how much hearing that means to me...

This is a piece of freestyle poetry i wrote in one of the worst times of my life... It's kinda got a weird beat to it, but anyway... Please tell me what you think, any and all comments are appreciated. It's one of the first poems i ever wrote, so please be kind. Constructive criticism is allowed, just don't go crazy. Thank you in advance NOTHING MORE Just one tear. Full of emotions, a drop of sunlight in the shade. A single streak of wetness, wiped away as quickly as it was made. When i lay alone at night, i think of what i've become, the things that have been changed. I think how my whole life has been stopped, restarted, stopped again and rearranged. The joy in my life has faded and all that remains is a bland existence. Ironic that all those months ago i though that i could go the distance. Was i crazy for loving somebody? No, but "be more careful" is the message they all say. I just wish i still had a heart left to break, there's just a hole every night and day. She took parts of me and broke them, and i'm left with just a piece or two. How can i rebuild myself if i can't get back what's due? Give me back my life, my love, my things, my body and my heart. Give me back everything i gave you, this time there's no restart. Let me live what's left of my life alone, like you want me to. I'm doing what you told me, isn't that enough for you? Stop hurting me, just stop the pain, get the hell out and let me be. No matter what you put me through i will not let you see. The single tear upon my cheek, that splashes on the floor. For you, because of you, one tear, just one... then nothing more.

Under the purple lemon tree we talk and laugh of many things The stories are woven and fortunes are told So honey child, harken to this one which never grows old. I stand forthwith, bright, lustrous, and bold. The road now leads onward, and round every bend A fearless warrior with his faithful friend...

Because of you... I cry at night. I wake up screaming. I sing sad songs. I lost some friends. My grades have gone haywire. I considered suicide. I almost went through with it. I lost my new gf. My parents wonder why i don't try anymore. My friends wonder why i don't smile anymore. My teachers wonder why i don't work anymore. Everyone wonders why i don't care anymore. Because of you, I'm missing what my life could have been... So are you happy now?

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky I am all sad and wondering why It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return Before the cows come home and this day adjourns Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives NOTE: And for the record i have no clue what this is about either... but it's fun

In milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky I am all sad and wondering why It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return Before the cows come home and this day adjourns Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home Full of pain and impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

In milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns, While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky I am all sad and wondering why It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry The Christ child rocks n' rolls, Apollo's light will never return Before the cows come home and this day adjourns Oh sweet Efron let me be The Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun So we may unite and live forever more, without the pain and sadness that we had before. Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr. and Mrs. Montague, never let our love be done and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams. For nowhere in your roiling desert slumber can the endless horseman find his home. Full of pain and impossible sadness, here i shall forever rest, no more to roam alone.

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I cried when i missed you. I cried when you were in hospital. I cried when you were mad at me. I cried when you were sad. I cried when you kissed me. I cried when you left me. I cried when you broke my heart. I cried at those times because i loved you... I never cried when you hit me. I never cried when you hurt me. I never cried when you broke my stuff. I never cried when you made fun of me. I never cried when you showed me off like a pet. I never cried when you lied to me. I never cried when you took control of me. I never cried at those times because i loved you... So many times, i felt like my world was falling apart and i didn't know what to do. I thought i really stopped caring for you, but... I saw you crying today and my heart throbbed. I wanted to look into your eyes and ask you "Why are you crying? In pain? In fear? In sadness? In love?" But as much as it kills me, i keep walking. I keep walking because i used to love you... but you never really cared... But it doesn't mean i don't care...

I found that when i wear a mask, the world seems fake, not me, but when i take a quick look out i see reality. The world can be a painful place that tears your soul apart, And other times you just want to give someone your heart, But i wore my mask too long and it's become a part of me... A reflex, my instinct, i show people what they want to see, And when the only person i showed my face stabbed me in the back, The mask that i wore became unhappy and cracked. Now i can't tell my intentions from those of my mask, and most of the time, i'm too afraid to ask. It's easier to be the mask to block out all the sorrow, but i think i would rather take of that mask and see my real tomorrow. My mask has craked and the cracks have spread and soon the world shall see, Exactly who i am, not my mask, the one, the only, me.

In milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns, While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky I am all sad and wondering why It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry The Christ child rocks n' rolls, Apollo's light will never return Before the cows come home and this day adjourns Oh sweet Efron let me be The Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun So we may unite and live forever more, without the pain and sadness that we had before.

Today i sang my heart out to show everyone who i really am... I made my father proud. I made my sister proud. I made my mother proud. I made my brother proud. I made my friends proud. I don't feel proud of the amazing job i did... But i am proud that i did it without you.

I'm gad you like it... it took m ea while to get everything i wanted to say down in words, but i'm happy with what came out... It really means a lot to me that people like it... All comments and feedback are greatly appreciated

You can't see the tears in my eyes... but they are there. You can't see the pain in my smile... but everyone else can. You can't feel the hurt in my heart... but it exists. You can never know how much you changed me, hurt me, destroyed the very things that make me who i am... but i will know. You can never truly understand how much i used to love you... but it is gone now. You will never be able to find someone who loves you with the will, faith, and trust that i did... but i don't care. Because you can't make me feel happy ever again... but i can. You used to hold my world in your hand... but now i'm free. And i will never let you hurt me again.

Avoiding my work Really avoiding my fear Wish i was stronger

Oh poor broken heart, Why are you so very sad? Wish i could fix you...

This is just something i came up with a while ago... i hope you all like it. I know it's long, sorry... I appreciate any and all feedback What did i do to deserve this pain? My heart ripped apart again and again. i thought i found love and i would be okay but love stayed for a while and then went away. Leaving behind my blood and my tears, And the shield that i hid behind all of these years. I showed you the real me that nobody knew because i believed and i trusted in you, I honestly thought you showed me the same, but i guess in your eyes it was all just a game. Every time i kissed you my world light up with a glow, When i held you tight, time just seemed to slow. The first time we made love i was frightened and scared, You told me to trust you, and i felt like you cared. I guess i was right to be so afraid, i never thought you would leave me feeling betrayed. When you were in my life, i felt so completed, Now i'm fighting just to live, but i'm being defeated. You gutted me, spreading lies and treachery Saying i tried to force you to make love to me. Saying i never cared and all i did was lie, telling other people not to trust "that guy". Now nobody likes me, no matter what i do, I just wish i had a real friend, somebody who knew. Everything you did, everything you said too, I guess in the end, i was just a pawn for you. Sensativity and true love are something you lack, If you need another weapon, i've got plenty of knives in my back. But even through all of this bittersweet sadness, i know that somewhere within all this madness, I learned about how to move on through it all, i learned that whenever anything falls, No matter the horror or pain that's inside, Let your heart be free and don't try to hide, For every person, it does not matter who, The end of one thing is the start of a new, Let yourself see everything you can be, and i know that you'll turn out better than me. My heart is in pieces that i can't repair, but i know i'll find somebody out there who will really care... So when people ask me "what has love done?", I can let a tear fall and say; It broke me, fixed me and broke me again, But i guess at the end of the day, i learned how to live and to love and to kiss and above all i learned something new. Sometimes there are people who just want to have someone or something they can use, To find the right person i guess i'll just wait and when i feel ready to start, No matter what happens, when where why or how, i will listen and follow my heart.

Thanks for all the feedback and comments. It's good to know that there are people out there who care

That's something to think about... Thank you