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lol u got me there so do u tink the poem any good though

yeah i get you. check my new poem out you'll find it in the forum called 'thou shall not'

ok everyone what do you think of the following poem how can i improve it need suggestions please, and no its got nothing to do with my life i just though i'd write it. Now a lonely broken heart Filled with overflowing pain and sorrow Caused by the person he once cherished No love shall ever befall him Till the day he gets his revenge Darkness and resentment surrounds him like a layer of warmth His intense feelings reflect any new love approaching him The rage builds up within him ready to erupt like the mighty volcano He watches her as she embraces her newfound lover, both guilty A drop of tear rolls down his eyes, down his cheeks and onto the earth Revenge he shall never taste for he still loves her........

thanks for your suggestion and yes i did write that jowelle, i thought i'd show this poem i wrote to this girl so she can see the soft side of me but wanted it to be checked by u guys. the funny thing about that poem i wrote is that its kind of a cross between a song and a poem lol would sound nice with music BUT I CANT SING Balhatain why do u say that girls might get scared? would u get scared jowelle?

ermm what do you think of the following poem, you can say what like, be critical thats what i want thanks : As I look deep into your eyes I realise you’re all that I need All that I want Such beauty and kindness you posses Girl, I wanna build my future with you I wanna share it with you So allow me to come forth And unravel my feelings for you I need you Thinking of ways that I can win your heart I wait for the day that I can say you’re mine I want to hold you, I want be close to your heart Girl, I want to be with you Are we meant for each other? No doubt about it But We’d neva know if we don’t give it a try Girl I love you

i tink we broke up cos wer so different from each other like we have different backgrounds (she likes drinkin i dont) she's much taller than me (but i dont tink that bothers us much except others like parents) she is a year an half older than me. i notice we get jealous of each other quckly like wen i am just talkin wit another girl or she is talkin with another guy we use to love each others company now we hardly talk its only online that we talk even then its just a small little conversation, i no we both lone for each other i can sense it. i really miss her so much she is my first true love. i want her to be mine though i really dun no wat to do..... how i miss her so muchh...i miss tellin her i lov her. not only hav i got a broken heart but i think i can neva love any one like that again is it possible ? i mean i will be scared mentally for teh loss of her lov.

Hi, i've jus broken up wit my GF cos of reasons were both not really sure of. our luv wasn't based on sex or stuff like that it was teh good old romeo type luv with words etc and thats why it hurts more. so how do you mend a broken heart? Can it even be mended? Dam wat a shame I lost her even though the feeling is there in both of us. soooooo saaaaddddd

THANX GREAT ADVISE. yeah i think she needs to know that i love her even in front of my friends. but one thing that really makes me angry is that i'm much shorter than her and that when she see's me with girlz my height she thinks wer an odd couple (me an her).

hey everyone hows it goin? good i hope anyway i'm really confused here i've met this girl an we both fell in love its been like 2months, i know she did love me because she is much taller than me but she still doesn't feel ashamed of me but the past few days she's being very envious with other girls that come an talk to me she starts complain every time and starts arguring with me. and tells me that i deserve better than her and she dont wanna hurt me. wats goin on? she tryin to break up or she tinks i'm 2 timin her?