11flower Posted December 25, 2004 Share Posted December 25, 2004 This is hardly a Christmas poem. It was written with someone in particular in mind. He's a basically unhappy soul. Sometimes he reaches out for something he needs. He's secretive. Then he comes out for something tasty, then offends, manipulates, verbally abuses, then crawls back to his cave, never to see the light. He doesn't want to see the light because it's too scary to change for the better. He's safe where he is. This person is the inspiration for this...poem. To this date, I'm still deciding the title. It has to do with... a WORM. Globular, wrinkled, bedraggled form Folding over on itself Downturned corners Of its mouth Beckoning to dine O divine! Drags from under the rock Where it hides Hopeful, bringing bits of slime Adhering droop, bubbling, gurgle, wriggle Shreak at sunshine Turn! Leave it behind To crawl and writhe Till it reaches familiar grime O divine! Panting Bitterness, I beg thee. 08/11/2004 Link to comment
Esprit Posted December 25, 2004 Share Posted December 25, 2004 Heh. I like it. Something about the choice of words and the flow...it just works. Though I can't help but feel sorry for whoever this individual may be. Anyway, thanks for that. Link to comment
11flower Posted December 26, 2004 Author Share Posted December 26, 2004 "Though I can't help but feel sorry for whoever this individual may be." Thank you, Espirit. That's actually the point of the poem. 11Flower Link to comment
Protex Posted December 26, 2004 Share Posted December 26, 2004 Very nice piece. I had the same empathy as the poster above. Good work. Link to comment
11flower Posted December 26, 2004 Author Share Posted December 26, 2004 Protex, Thank you, Sir. 11Flower Link to comment
11flower Posted February 4, 2005 Author Share Posted February 4, 2005 I finally have a title for my poem. It shall be entitled, "Anomaly" 11Flower. PS If you have not read it yet, it's here in this forum. The person still unfortunately reminds me of a person like this sometimes. Not all the time, but sometimes. We wish him well. Link to comment
11flower Posted February 8, 2005 Author Share Posted February 8, 2005 Second thought, the title "Fetid Anomaly" is more appropriate for my poem about the worthless worm. 8) 11F. Link to comment
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