Lain Posted March 22, 2004 Share Posted March 22, 2004 I'm huddled up with my knees to my chest Rocking back and forth to an unknown beat I turned my back to the world today To get over it, to admit defeat I try then fail to lock feelings away They keep on making me helpless and weak The joy and pain of emotions are sweet When the bloom of despair is not at its peak I'm still drawn to your flame like a small silly moth Atop my knees there is now my face All your words mean something only to me Everybody knows I'm a head hopeless case All I want is to hide but I can't decide how Crystal clear paths; yours, theirs, mine I was probably meant to watch you all live If I don't need to exist, fine Link to comment
just_smile Posted March 23, 2004 Share Posted March 23, 2004 hey wow i thought that poem was great, it was very deep and i can relate especially with what is happening to me right now. i have read a few of your poems and think your a great writer so keep it up ~LJ =; Link to comment
Lain Posted March 23, 2004 Author Share Posted March 23, 2004 hey wow i thought that poem was great, it was very deep and i can relate especially with what is happening to me right now. i have read a few of your poems and think your a great writer so keep it up ~LJ =; Thank you, you make me feel great by liking my poetry. Here is something I just wrote: You don't seem to understand I can't force myself to explain From time to time I'm diving deep Into the whirlpool of snow white pain There's nothing wrong about being self-centered We are what we are by nature, it's right Once your interior blows with this anguish You've known the taste of losing the light The last thing I want is to make you feel guilty It's not your fault, the problem is mine However, care means being warm inside It would be enough to ask: 'Are you fine?' I wonder how I could go that far Now recognizing my paths' track It will be good, I let it all out Just give me my broken life back! Cheers! Link to comment
just_smile Posted March 25, 2004 Share Posted March 25, 2004 hey aww thanks, i really liked that poem too, if you want to share any others im all ears. ~LJ =; Link to comment
Lain Posted March 28, 2004 Author Share Posted March 28, 2004 hey aww thanks, i really liked that poem too, if you want to share any others im all ears. ~LJ =; Thank you. Here we go. From caress to indifference Either right or wrong Being two-faced and puzzling Could you last for long?! She sheds her skins The essense is ultimate If you do the same Think twice, it's intimate Both minds are twisted There is no doubt Her all craves for backup That's what it's about Look around yourself See the sacrificed Hurt her one more time She is mesmerized Everything is inconstant Wounds like opened doors She will not let go The choice is yours Link to comment
Lain Posted March 28, 2004 Author Share Posted March 28, 2004 I could try and get myself out of this place If you didn't rub off your indistinct trace Now someone must take me away from here To the realm of happiness we should steer In those depths echos a silent scream For these torments are more than a wicked whim I sense presense of yours then feel satiated My nature was newly invigorated Pitiful humans need just a bit Emotional polychrome tends to hit Nothing will crush the hidden potential Temptation of giving is too influential Letting go everything that restricts our limit Deadly fraud may rule when they've proved us timid You are still caged which I know for sure Revive, join the dance or forget about cure Link to comment
Lain Posted March 31, 2004 Author Share Posted March 31, 2004 I am feeling your pain when you are down Reaching out my hands to the martyr's crown. The dazzling silence has made me blind Not being numb like a soul in the grind. I will dance on the broken glass by your side Without asking myself about fatuous pride. The feelings seem as if they were stars Showing up everywhere in your absense that chars. Link to comment
just_smile Posted April 1, 2004 Share Posted April 1, 2004 hey i really like you style of writing. i really like the last on, especially the second stanze The dazzling silence has made me blind Not being numb like a soul in the grind. keep writing, i think you are really good. ~LJ =; Link to comment
Lain Posted April 4, 2004 Author Share Posted April 4, 2004 A countenance that is haunting your mind, familiar and plain. When he vanishes gratiutously into the night, you both go insane. A picture-a cloud that is curdling again above your laugh. Raining down the same, taking over the place when you walk the path. A moment you was lucky to catch of his distant life. A glance the eyes bear stuck in them- Nothingness and drive. Link to comment
Lain Posted April 12, 2004 Author Share Posted April 12, 2004 I barely made it through today again. The days are all the same. A thought I cannot turn away: Is it my fault? Is it your aim? I'm tired of this feeling- pain. It chilled me to the bone. I haven't seen your sun for weeks, Too long, too far from home. I know you are right there, somewhere. My tears now glow and sound. I want to burst out crying loud Falling to the ground. Where do we go from here? Nowhere.. I still believe in love. For those who don't: Through all the time you'll never rise above. Link to comment
just_smile Posted April 12, 2004 Share Posted April 12, 2004 hey wow i really liked those poems, i thought they were really good, i especially liked the last one. mainly this stanza: I know you are right there, somewhere. My tears now glow and sound. I want to burst out crying loud Falling to the ground. maybe you could share these with the rest of the forum, im sure they would give you some advice and opinions on them, and im sure they would really like to read them, they are reallly good. keep writing ~LJ =; Link to comment
tainted_soul Posted April 12, 2004 Share Posted April 12, 2004 haven't read but the first few, but i really liked this part I was probably meant to watch you all live If I don't need to exist, fine i can really relate to that Link to comment
EmptySoul Posted April 24, 2004 Share Posted April 24, 2004 I really liked it. EmptySoul Link to comment
Lain Posted July 7, 2004 Author Share Posted July 7, 2004 Is back occasionally When my sun sets, By a taper, I take out my pen and paper. Happy once, Now full of sadness - Going high and low is madness. Stay away, You always do! I have lost my patience, too. Come, change, come, I'm not a moaner, Just a loner, loner.. Link to comment
just_smile Posted July 9, 2004 Share Posted July 9, 2004 hey again i like your poem it shows a lot of feelings, was it aimed at anyone in particular? ~LJ =; Link to comment
Lain Posted July 14, 2004 Author Share Posted July 14, 2004 Well, only the third stanza, just_smile. The poem in general was written during a bad period of my life when nothing seemed to be going right. I am perfectly fine now, however. No worries. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 23, 2004 Share Posted July 23, 2004 all of your poetry is well written adn full of emotion.Keep writing you have a talent meagan Link to comment
Lain Posted January 6, 2005 Author Share Posted January 6, 2005 New poems.. My inmost soul, my inner self or selves? Ambivalent. Yes and no. The wanted thing, both mute and calling, what is it? Lack of gratitude. Hello again, Ms Conscience, speak then listen: I can't stand your whistle! There is a goal born long ago - hush! - I will never let it go. Link to comment
Lain Posted January 6, 2005 Author Share Posted January 6, 2005 Another one.. There are so many freaks but not enough circuses They despise everybody taken by shallow purposes My friend, yes, you are special just like everyone else Ha ha, do you now get it, slave of social spells? Not at all is it sensible: Arrogance for no reason I regret to inform you: Your mind is your own prison! What makes us all human is long ago gone Pride, wrath, envy, lust, sloth, celebrate: we are done! Link to comment
Lain Posted January 9, 2005 Author Share Posted January 9, 2005 Denying the face of God Rejecting the idea of Belief I still hear angels singing above me and demons growling underneath. Together we cut the thorns of life During our voyage to the Milky Way "One can never ever be truly happy without knowing the pain," I say Watch in awe my solo flight I am free to fly, aeria gloris Pull me back again – my feet touch the ground - and revive the dreams of past glories. There is no other way out but to deeply breathe for more The depths of longing rise, while the spirits fall to the core. Human beings live eagerly when they are lucky enough to have a good reason If you stand alone, your existence must be nothing else than a boring season. Neverendless race makes us feel alive Not to fall on the run, just not to forget How to dream, how to love, how to yearn for what's left We will be able, I bet! Link to comment
Delaurence23 Posted January 11, 2005 Share Posted January 11, 2005 only read the first one but great metaphor here ' "I'm still drawn to your flame like a small silly moth" Link to comment
Lain Posted January 28, 2005 Author Share Posted January 28, 2005 Thanks! Dedicated to [...] Out of sight, out of heart Not a such, I'm torn apart Am I blind? I cannot see Who you are you'll always be "Hope dies last, again, just wait," Mind says, "No, it is too late!" I will soon forget the past and get rid of you at last! Link to comment
ForAnother Posted January 28, 2005 Share Posted January 28, 2005 Dang sorry you had so much pain. I would like to say that I loved your first poem... and it made me read the rest. I wasn't as satisfied with most as much as the first and the last one on the third page When my sun sets, By a taper, I take out my pen and paper. Happy once, Now full of sadness - Going high and low is madness. Stay away, You always do! I have lost my patience, too. Come, change, come, I'm not a moaner, Just a loner, loner.. But I enjoyed your style of writing. I would like to say, chear up... Your mind works in a similar pattern as mine when you write, and its really interesting to read. Keep it up. ForAnother Link to comment
Lain Posted January 28, 2005 Author Share Posted January 28, 2005 Well, actually, I am quite an optimistic person, and I only compose poems when I am feeling extremely bad! This is the way it goes, I cannot help it. Link to comment
ForAnother Posted January 28, 2005 Share Posted January 28, 2005 I understand, I think we are all like that When we are depressed it is usually the most angst we feel in our lives (especially when we are young) so it is very heart felt... as opposed to something light hearted... its just interesting... its why the media reports bad news... simply because its interesting. ForAnother Link to comment
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