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    Picture Book

    Picture Book

    You ask me how I've fallen?
    Apart; Away
    I feel so empty an'
    It just seems to stay

    You don't understand?
    I can try to explain
    I'll break it all down and
    You'll see it quite plain

    -My decorated skin
    A beautiful creation
    I sketch it in
    Using my imagination

    -My imitation of art
    Something like Vango
    Cuz' I'm just so smart
    Didn't you know?

    -My picture book
    Even the kids can see
    Just take a look
    There's something wrong with me

    That's all there is to it I guess
    There's not really much to say
    But I've catalogued this mess
    In a less wordy way

    It's on my decorated skin
    Through my imitation of art
    It's my picture book:
    "How I Fell Apart"

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    I like it. I think it could use some more length, though. Nice work!

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    Originally Posted by Guarana Galrok
    I like it. I think it could use some more length, though. Nice work!
    I'm used to getting critiqued for my poems being too lengthy. lol, you should check out some of my older ones. Anway, thanks for the comment.


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