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08-09-2004, 01:39 AM
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poem please read and reply thanks
One look into your eyes and I melt,
It's the most incredible feeling I have ever felt. Do you know that I dream of you at night? I see you clearly it's a beautiful sight. The arrow that I got shot with that day, Has made me in love that is the way it's going to stay. Nobody can stop the love that I feel for you, This is just something that I cannot do. You make everything better with just one kiss, These are the things that I do miss. I close my eyes to see your face, The face that noone will ever replace. I lay in my bed and look at the pictures on the wall, What matters in the world are the things that are small. Never take for granted the people you love, You never know the day when it's there time to go above. Never let anyone take you for granted as well, When you start to feel it you will be able to tell. Always walk around with a smile on your face, Always give people time and there space. Never give up on who you love no matter what, Never turn to a knife and hide your tears with a cut. Keep your head high and fight to make it through, Do the things in life that you need to do. You are not alone and neither am I , It's ok to be hurt and it's ok to cry. So smile for me and I'll smile for you, A lie may hurt but the truth does to. By:me Tell me what you think? 
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08-09-2004, 01:44 AM
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 Amazing poem.You have a way with wprds.~Meagan~
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08-09-2004, 01:49 AM
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Good one.
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08-09-2004, 02:01 AM
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Thats an awesome poem, It's really well done, keep up the brilliant work
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08-09-2004, 02:05 AM
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That poem was amazing. You have a real talent, I love your writing. My favorite line was
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08-09-2004, 02:24 AM
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Amazing!!!!
Wish i had the talent.  Quote:
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08-09-2004, 07:52 AM
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OMG I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! EXCELLENT POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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08-09-2004, 08:02 AM
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wow, that was really touching!! lol i had guns & roses - dont cry on in the background lol
i have so many poems, but i dunno why i dont post them on here |
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08-09-2004, 10:04 AM
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Aww thankyou all so much
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08-09-2004, 10:18 AM
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hey luv, i just re-read again, and again wow!!! lol got any tips on how to right a poem, i have got a new bunch of lines that descirbe how i feel, but there not the type of linnes that link togther like your ones!
i just have to say the best part of that poem for me was this little bit Quote:
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