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  1. The idea is good.. one thing is definitely make sure you spell the artist's name correctly. It is O'Keeffe. One change you can make is to mix up the sentence structure a bit. You start many of them with the subject right off that bat. You can also combine the idea of the 2nd and 3rd sentence so the reading flows together better and is less truncated sounding. Also I would combine the 4th and 5th sentence into one and take out the ambiguity about what "they" in the 5th sentence refers to. Beyond that look at your diction. Circle the words you use repetitively and see if there is a more varied or eloquent way to say those things. Those are some quick fixes. I hope my input can be helpful to you.
  2. Those are really great pics and I like the story. Where can I get me a man like that? haha
  3. Thanks Quirky. I haven't really had lessons in singing. I had like.. 4 months? when I was 16 but that really wasn't enough to learn very much. I think because she was more focused on getting me to pronounce italian correctly. So that was about 6 years ago I'd like to do some singing and music on the side and try to make a little money off of it. But mostly, I would like to perform.
  4. Yeah I thought it would be fun to try branching out from the more classical type vocals but I seem to be semi clueless when it comes to singing in other ways! I put a little thing together with short excerpts of "country", classic rock, and R&B/pop.. but now that I listen back it is funny how hard it is for me to sing without a full sound and vibrato...
  5. That looks pretty cool actually.. would make a really good logo.
  6. Oh good idea for a thread.. don't know of any talents currently but I'll keep you posted..
  7. quirky- the very first thing I thought when I heard your music was "bjork" lol. Do you listen to her? I want to sing in a band but I am a n00b in some serious need of some training. -_-' Oh and I write the music..
  8. ^that post was mainly about commenting on my comment You might like John Denver... (I do actually like a few of his songs)
  9. Your nose kind of distracted me. Moving all over the place... You might like Iron and Wine or the soundtrack to Once (the movie) if you don't know of them already.
  10. I am letting him talk to me because he keeps begging somebody just get me out of this hell. ..
  11. That is awsome! I am getting a gym membership as well once I get the energy to eat or drink. I want to put on some muscle and lose some fat goals help.
  12. Wow you guys have some really nice cameras and pictures Oo. I just scanned through but Enola: your pictures look great. Seriously. Some of them could be used in text or in magazines. There was one of a fountain with the water pouring down and then a road misty at night with the trees along the side.. sooo pretty. Sidehop: great, fresh colors.. and your daughter is uber cute! Colorblue: this reminds me so much of my dog he loves biting at the water. Pretty cool to see it still in just one moment
  13. Looks good. I just noticed your first and last name is on those images though. Are you sure you want that online?
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